11-02-2017, 10:56 AM
At night,
store lights send you over
their ancient cobbled roads
with bars resounding music.
Strolling on, I smile as you dance
beneath our passing bodies.
I like that this poem is friendly and kind.
It offers admiration to something common,
(likely ignored or overlooked by most)
granting the reward of personification.
It was a clever use of the word "bars", too,
because it gives the reader a choice of two meanings.
This poem taught me something, too. Thank you!
nibbed
store lights send you over
their ancient cobbled roads
with bars resounding music.
Strolling on, I smile as you dance
beneath our passing bodies.
I like that this poem is friendly and kind.
It offers admiration to something common,
(likely ignored or overlooked by most)
granting the reward of personification.
It was a clever use of the word "bars", too,
because it gives the reader a choice of two meanings.
This poem taught me something, too. Thank you!
nibbed
there's always a better reason to love