10-24-2017, 11:40 AM
Cutting all of the "he" and "his" made a world of a difference. Especially for the second stanza, which is a lot clearer to me. The original poem was nice but your simple edit elevated it that much more.
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Second Edit: Wednesday Night Drunk - by Richard - 10-22-2017, 04:37 AM
RE: Wednesday Night Drunk - by naeshelle - 10-22-2017, 06:35 PM
RE: Wednesday Night Drunk - by Knot - 10-22-2017, 10:17 PM
RE: Wednesday Night Drunk - by Richard - 10-23-2017, 12:03 PM
RE: First Edit: Wednesday Night Drunk - by Richard - 10-24-2017, 06:17 AM
RE: First Edit: Wednesday Night Drunk - by Todd - 10-24-2017, 06:43 AM
RE: First Edit: Wednesday Night Drunk - by naeshelle - 10-24-2017, 11:40 AM
RE: First Edit: Wednesday Night Drunk - by Richard - 10-24-2017, 12:12 PM
RE: Second Edit: Wednesday Night Drunk - by Todd - 10-24-2017, 01:16 PM
RE: Second Edit: Wednesday Night Drunk - by Richard - 10-24-2017, 02:28 PM
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