Second Edit: Wednesday Night Drunk

[Todd]

Hi Richard,

Some comments for you.

First Edit:

Wednesday Night Drunk

For Gord Downie--while I'm not acquainted with this singer, I do understand the high school moments of connection over music and having that lead somewhere. It does give the poem a universal feel.

I wouldn't be hung over today
if you didn't die yesterday.--Nothing wrong with this opening but I do have an edit suggestion that you can use or ignore (like everything else). What if you moved this idea to the end of the poem and bracketed everything by perhaps making these changes:

If you didn't die yesterday
I wouldn't remember (or something like this)

High school memories resurrected--if you made the above change you could shorten  to High school resurected
with each glass, until I can taste
the stale beer on her breath again--This is a good sequence. It plays on the sense aspect of memory and sets the scene.
and smell her flicked cigarettes.
She wore Canadian flags in her hair,--good specific details
her lips softer because of my inexperience.--I've had to think back to first kisses. I would think her lips may feel harder because you tensed a bit due to inexperience and didn't move into the kiss. I'm overthinking I know. Perhaps you keep the same idea and sidestep the only in my mind inconsistency by substituting "because of" with "despite"
I had never heard of "Ahead By a Century"
before our first kiss.

I can't even remember what I said--Nice break leading into the next line.
when we broke up,
but that song is like an old friend,
who sounds better with each drink
and is still there when I wake up.--I like the end sequence.

Here's where I think you do a strophe break and invert your original opening:

If you didn't die yesterday,
I wouldn't be hung over today.

It's got a lot of promise. I hope the comments help.

Best,

Todd