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Too Restless to Sleep (Revision 5)

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10-21-2017, 12:52 AM

Good to hear. Thanks, Knot. It feels like I'm inching my way to completion.

If I were to change long grass and flowers to something else (and I'm not sure honestly), I'd lean toward "sedge grass" and "periwinkles"--though I'm not sure the speaker would think that deliberately. Mulling it over.

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Too Restless to Sleep (Revision 5) - by Todd - 10-19-2017, 06:48 AM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep - by abstractconstriction - 10-19-2017, 02:57 PM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep - by Todd - 10-20-2017, 12:14 AM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep - by Knot - 10-20-2017, 01:01 AM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep - by Todd - 10-20-2017, 02:39 AM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep (Revision) - by Todd - 10-20-2017, 03:06 AM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep (Revision) - by Knot - 10-20-2017, 03:27 AM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep (Revision) - by Todd - 10-20-2017, 03:59 AM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep (Revision 2) - by Todd - 10-20-2017, 05:54 AM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep (Revision 2) - by Keith - 10-20-2017, 07:44 AM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep (Revision 2) - by Todd - 10-20-2017, 09:26 AM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep (Revision 2) - by Richard - 10-20-2017, 01:35 PM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep (Revision 3) - by Todd - 10-20-2017, 02:09 PM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep (Revision 3) - by Lizzie - 10-20-2017, 04:20 PM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep (Revision 3) - by Knot - 10-20-2017, 09:52 PM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep (Revision 3) - by Todd - 10-20-2017, 10:46 PM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep (Revision 4) - by Knot - 10-20-2017, 11:45 PM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep (Revision 4) - by Todd - 10-21-2017, 12:52 AM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep (Revision 4) - by Lizzie - 10-21-2017, 01:07 AM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep (Revision 4) - by Todd - 10-21-2017, 01:26 AM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep (Revision 4) - by Richard - 10-21-2017, 12:08 PM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep (Revision 4) - by Todd - 10-21-2017, 01:58 PM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep (Revision 4) - by vagabond - 10-21-2017, 04:34 PM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep (Revision 5) - by Todd - 02-23-2018, 07:08 AM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep (Revision 5) - by vagabond - 02-23-2018, 10:18 AM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep (Revision 5) - by Richard - 02-27-2018, 08:48 AM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep (Revision 5) - by Todd - 03-01-2018, 06:11 AM

RE: Too Restless to Sleep (Revision 5) - by allisonkreid - 06-24-2018, 10:06 AM

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