Edit 3: Sepulture

[dedalus87]

Hi alexorande,

I thought the poem describes a sort of cycle as seen by the speaker and his companion (lover?). It made me think of the tide and it's periodicity, especially since there is a lot of water related symbols: blue brilliance, drowning, pall woven out of water, etc. I especially liked the rich imagery in the second stanza.

Congregation 
 
Last beams of blue brilliance either "beam" here or "are" in the second verse. I like beam.
is being pushed by our titan 
against a black and boneless embrace I think "and" can be dropped here. I also like the slight contrast of "blue brilliance" and "black boneless"
till she drowns in the west. I don't get who "she" is. The beam? The titan? The embrace?
There's a nice alliteration of the letter b throughout the stanza. Maybe you could enhance it when revising.
  
And we're left with the pall I interpret "pall" here as having a double meaning, both as covering the drowned woman from the previous stanza and as a cloud of water over the whole scene.
she wove out of water,
that glowed in the dampness
of ages-old teardrops
from gathering stars. Great personification!
I really like the imagery in this stanza.
 
Then time will reset
that last lovely rite
before we resume
our morning routines.