10-16-2017, 09:34 PM
Hi Richard,
strengthened by the revision, I think.
Just a couple of small suggestions;
'lost' for 'hid'
(Is there a way to improve on 'rain', not 'storm' but similar?)
'pools' for puddles'
Best, Knot.
strengthened by the revision, I think.
Just a couple of small suggestions;
'lost' for 'hid'
(Is there a way to improve on 'rain', not 'storm' but similar?)
'pools' for puddles'
Best, Knot.

