10-15-2017, 07:44 PM
Hi Richard - For me, the first line of the edit doesn't work as well as the original.
Original: Clouds grey as a brain.
I'm seeing a cloud in the sky that looks like a brain, or a brain in the sky that looks like a cloud.
Edit 1: Clouds grey as my brain.
My brain/your brain is hidden from view, inside a head with a face on it.
"My brain" I read as thoughts/feelings/perceptions - clouds grey as my mood.
I liked the unexpected cloud picture of the original.
Original: Clouds grey as a brain.
I'm seeing a cloud in the sky that looks like a brain, or a brain in the sky that looks like a cloud.
Edit 1: Clouds grey as my brain.
My brain/your brain is hidden from view, inside a head with a face on it.
"My brain" I read as thoughts/feelings/perceptions - clouds grey as my mood.
I liked the unexpected cloud picture of the original.