10-12-2017, 12:56 AM
(10-10-2017, 11:43 AM)Caine Wrote:My Kindergarten Teacher
My Kindergarten Teacher told me that
I'd either be a retard or genius
I thought there was no difference, The idea in this stanza is really fascinating. The opening line mentioning your kindergarden teacher makes it more relatable.
Day dreams just feel distant
The time is closin' in
My heart's pump don't match my pace,
Breathe escape; shell's encase
My Father's roof shall crack I'm a bit confused what you mean by "My Father's roof shall crack." Are you referencing your father's abuse or disappointment, or your own internal emotion?
And I will be born again,
Flip a coin cause I stand
To gain everything Maybe earlier on mention what areas in life you are referring to when you say that you "stand/ To gain everything." I really life the how the poem ends with a shorter stanza and the rhythm cause by each lines length.

