First Edit: Winter Storm

First Edit: Winter Storm

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10-11-2017, 10:49 AM

(10-11-2017, 08:21 AM)Richard Wrote: Winter Storm

Clouds grey as a brain.
Ice pellets fall and shatter
like broken dreams. Eh, it's concrete to abstract, unlike both above and below -- the metaphor really doesn't work. But ah, I'm echoing. Maybe something as sharp as "brain", "practiced smile"?
But fresh snow isn't nearly as cold
as a practiced smile that covers one's face.

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First Edit: Winter Storm - by Richard - 10-11-2017, 08:21 AM

RE: Winter Storm - by just mercedes - 10-11-2017, 09:04 AM

RE: Winter Storm - by QDeathstar - 10-11-2017, 09:15 AM

RE: Winter Storm - by shemthepenman - 10-11-2017, 09:47 AM

RE: Winter Storm - by RiverNotch - 10-11-2017, 10:49 AM

RE: Winter Storm - by Richard - 10-11-2017, 11:14 AM

RE: Winter Storm - by rose - 10-12-2017, 01:04 AM

RE: First Edit: Winter Storm - by Richard - 10-12-2017, 09:27 PM

RE: First Edit: Winter Storm - by Linda - 10-14-2017, 02:06 AM

RE: First Edit: Winter Storm - by UlrickMasters - 10-14-2017, 02:57 AM

RE: First Edit: Winter Storm - by Richard - 10-14-2017, 12:12 PM

RE: First Edit: Winter Storm - by Wastrel - 10-15-2017, 07:44 PM

RE: First Edit: Winter Storm - by RiverNotch - 10-15-2017, 08:36 PM

RE: First Edit: Winter Storm - by Richard - 10-15-2017, 11:43 PM

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