Version 3: You & I

[Knot]

Hi ClaireLou,
like the sentiment, and S3 and S4 particularly.
I think you could lose (just a bit of) the 'sappiness'
by some trimming and changing the order of the stanzas,
as in;

We may be older
but we have fought pirates,
believed in fairies,
buried treasure,

secrets sealed
in a [what type of?] box
at the bottom of the garden,
silent, safe.

Everyday,
[when I remember this?]
if just for a moment,
you make me smile.

'silent, safe' - doesn't do enough, I think, perhaps describe that part of the garden a bit more?
I'm not a fan of the title (I'm afraid), why not name the piece after your friend?

Best, Knot.