My Kindergarten Teacher [Explicit Language]
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(10-10-2017, 12:22 PM)alexorande Wrote:  
(10-10-2017, 11:43 AM)Caine Wrote:  
My Kindergarten Teacher

My Kindergarten Teacher tells me that
I'd either be a retard or genius
I thought there was no difference,


Day dreams just feel distant
The time is closin' in
My heart's pump don't match my pace,


Breathe escape; shell's encase
My Father's roof shall crack
And I will be born again,


Flip a coin cause I stand
To Gain Everything
Hi Caine,
A poem with language loose as this maybe would be easier to read with lower case letters beginning each line? And maybe lower case those other words like "gain" and "everything", words that don't need to be capitalized. I also wish you lingered on the topic of your kindergarten teacher a little more, since it was in the title.
my Kindergarten Teacher tells me that
I'd either be a retard or genius
I thought there was no difference,

day dreams just feel distant
the time is closin' in
my heart's pump don't match my pace,

breathe escape; shell's encase
my Father's roof shall crack
and I will be born again,

flip a coin cause I stand
to gain everything

I lowercase all of the first lines. Did you mean lowercase all the first lines , even the beginning of the sentence?

Also, the tittle is flexible. I didn't know what to title it so I just used kindergarten teacher.
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RE: My Kindergarten Teacher [Explicit Language] - by Caine - 10-10-2017, 12:47 PM
RE: My Kindergarten Teacher [Explicit Language] - by Ineedadrinkor2or3 - 10-17-2017, 11:09 AM
RE: My Kindergarten Teacher [Explicit Language] - by silentseas - 10-16-2017, 10:34 AM



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