10-10-2017, 12:40 PM
My Kindergarten Teacher
My Kindergarten Teacher tells me that
I'd either be a retard or genius. present tense and past tense makes these lines very confusing for me
I thought there was no difference,"Comma your way into the next stanza? Why?! It's not purposeful, it's not sensible, it's not even stylistically poetic" ~ Tectak. Going back, maybe you want told and not tells?
Day dreams just feel distant
The time is closin' in
My heart's pump don't match my pace,
Breathe escape; shell's encase
My Father's roof shall crack
And I will be born again, this is an interesting way to describe suicide
Flip a coin cause I stand
To Gain Everythingodd capitalization and superfluous cliche make the ending weak.
My Kindergarten Teacher tells me that
I'd either be a retard or genius. present tense and past tense makes these lines very confusing for me
I thought there was no difference,"Comma your way into the next stanza? Why?! It's not purposeful, it's not sensible, it's not even stylistically poetic" ~ Tectak. Going back, maybe you want told and not tells?
Day dreams just feel distant
The time is closin' in
My heart's pump don't match my pace,
Breathe escape; shell's encase
My Father's roof shall crack
And I will be born again, this is an interesting way to describe suicide
Flip a coin cause I stand
To Gain Everythingodd capitalization and superfluous cliche make the ending weak.