10-04-2017, 05:29 PM
Hi,
I was not thrilled with the first version; my mistake, the changing of the first stanza makes a big difference.
In such a context, I would try to avoid negatives as
not of blood, of heart, (of blood more, rather...) may be that's me, and it's not my writing... Just a thought.
I was not thrilled with the first version; my mistake, the changing of the first stanza makes a big difference.
In such a context, I would try to avoid negatives as
not of blood, of heart, (of blood more, rather...) may be that's me, and it's not my writing... Just a thought.
Huckleberry