09-30-2017, 09:27 PM
Hi ClareLou - Im reading your explanatory note as if it's part of the poem, and agree that as the speaker is addressing a friend she's known for 30 years, some sappiness is allowed ;-).
First of all - again with reference to the explanatory note, the word heart is repeated in the poem and every word is heart-felt. Quite honestly - and call me sappy- I haven't the heart to suggest the removal of a single word - only possibly to suggest that the poem ends with - "surging through my veins". The poem dis-proves the saying - "blood is thicker than water".
First of all - again with reference to the explanatory note, the word heart is repeated in the poem and every word is heart-felt. Quite honestly - and call me sappy- I haven't the heart to suggest the removal of a single word - only possibly to suggest that the poem ends with - "surging through my veins". The poem dis-proves the saying - "blood is thicker than water".