Version 2: You Need Me

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Say what you wish
for your words mean nothing.                   I would skip the first two lines ...your words are simply...
They are simply the foam
that tops my morning coffee
disappearing with each sip.

Fingers tapping furiously,
troll-like senses tingling
as your acid tongue                                    perhaps omit the acid to avoid redundancy?
turns the litmus paper red.

Hiding beind your keyboard,                        typo
reaction is your rush,
an andrenalin junkie                                     sp.
craving your next fix.

You grasp at that
which others do not wish to hear,
cutting at skin
pulling at broken limbs.

But I wil not rise,                                          sp.
I understand your pain,
a child alone in a playground,                      I want to put a colon here, then a space between the last two lines.
I know your secret.




Hi ClaireLou

I couldn't tell if the speaker felt animosity or camaraderie.
It made me wonder about secrets, think of a few of my own.
Thanks for taking me away, once again.

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