09-27-2017, 06:51 AM
The title is a good foreshadowing of what is to come, I enjoyed how the poem transitions from the large image to the macro and the image of a face trapped in the miniscus of the half drop with that world within an atom kind of feel. The only line I would look at is L2 its not as smooth as the others, maybe just ....the sinks rim.....I could be missing something with the bowl reference but unless it's important I don't think it adds a great deal. Very much enjoyed this image and the spin you give the reader, nice job. Keith
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