Edit 3: Sepulture

[Tiger the Lion]

Hey Alex. A couple notes to consider.

Nightly Congregation "Congregation" would be tighter and more evocative of other meanings IMO 
 
Our titan drowned forcing light 
into the ambiguous night I think this rhyme hurts more than helps 
and the pall they had woven
from out of the water 
is stained with the tears cliche even in this context
of the gathering stars. -- this section is long and would be served better with some punctuation or space. It's a long breath and hard to enjoy.
 
This will happen tomorrow, and the day after, 
and throughout many lifetimes;
as if it wasn't a routine. the last strophe carries the message but sounds a little preachy doing it. 

Good Luck with it, I'll be back. Routinely. 
Paul