Hurricane Ex

[Todd]

Love the conceit you've chosen. 

Hurricane Ex--Great title! It establishes the force of the opening.

The hurricane hit;--This line isn't the most powerful opening. You get into the action quickly but what you could do if you wanted to is include a woman's name. Example: Diane hit the house at 155 mph/She blew the front down... (category 5, etc) 
knocked the front down like a heavyweight.
Emptied bed room closets--bedroom (no space)
in a heart-beat of thunder.
Flash flooded my cheque books;
left my wallet like a washed out flounder
flopping for oxygen--love the humor and image of this.

It took two of the kids
the good looking ones.--funny follow-up line. good-looking should have a hyphen.
Mini-me was left cowering in an open corner
making like a lamp-stand without a bulb.--Haha

Downstairs fared no better;
car in the lobby, golf clubs in the shitter.--the disaster of breakups. The ex as metaphor (enjoyed this progression)

"How did it tear the sleeves
off all my shirts"?--Love the petty destruction and something this specific.

The electricals smashed and strewn,
my molten phone in the kettle.
Dead-doored kitchen cabinets.
A favorite Manchester United poster
ripped and sodden,
the smell of piss on my lazy-boy
and the cackle of laughter
on the retreating wind.--while this technically makes me think of the wicked witch and the tornado--I'm still good with it.

Fun poem, Billy.

Best,

Todd