09-20-2017, 03:04 PM
Hello,
It's both rich and simple. It does so much, evokes so much with only a few interplaying words like small gestures each complementing the other perfectly. The last line doesn't land like a thud for me. It just brings it all back home, back to earth. But not with a crash, more like a light Impressionism. Bodies moving through fat sunbeams.
It's both rich and simple. It does so much, evokes so much with only a few interplaying words like small gestures each complementing the other perfectly. The last line doesn't land like a thud for me. It just brings it all back home, back to earth. But not with a crash, more like a light Impressionism. Bodies moving through fat sunbeams.
(09-20-2017, 01:42 PM)Tiger the Lion Wrote: Reborn
the late summer sun
had sapped our strength
‘til the sky smashed open
a piñata of ions
and we played like children