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Edit 2: The Scale in Amenthes
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09-11-2017, 12:58 AM
IMHO it still needs re-write. Not getting a lot of clarity. It's like you are trying to be obtuse when it's not necessary just to seem "poetic" in some places while missing out on some better adjectives in others. This gives it an overall cloudiness and unevenness that I suspect you don't really want. Just one opinion, though.
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Edit 2: The Scale in Amenthes - by alonso ramoran - 08-13-2017, 11:34 AM
RE: The Scale in Amenthes - by Achebe - 08-13-2017, 03:50 PM
RE: The Scale in Amenthes - by alonso ramoran - 08-13-2017, 09:06 PM
RE: The Scale in Amenthes - by ellajam - 08-13-2017, 09:26 PM
RE: The Scale in Amenthes - by Todd - 08-15-2017, 01:04 AM
RE: The Scale in Amenthes - by alonso ramoran - 09-09-2017, 02:43 PM
RE: The Scale in Amenthes - by Yjack123 - 09-11-2017, 12:58 AM
RE: The Scale in Amenthes - by alonso ramoran - 09-12-2017, 08:12 AM
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