09-09-2017, 12:53 AM
(08-18-2017, 01:42 PM)typing mantis Wrote: There are tumults in the ocean,Hello Typing Mantis: Youre poem was quite enjoyable (I like them tight and neat).
but the ship must sail,
it cannot sink.
I must reach the port,
I cannot sleep,
not a wink.
when times are hard
and light is bleak,
sea is the paper,
and tears are ink.
perhaps it could be even tighter and more dramtic, an example of what I mean:
Ocean is tumultuous
ship must sail,
cannot sink.
to port must reach,
nary a sleeps wink.
this may add a faster pace to the read. Creating a feel of urgency that
a ship on the ocean in trouble would have. Just a thought
Thanks Homer
Someday the Mystery will be known

