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Third Edit: Dollar Store Blues

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09-01-2017, 05:22 AM

Richard, a few slight edits but great result. Minor typo L2: feels

I really like this one. It feels polished.

Todd

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Third Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Richard - 08-24-2017, 05:26 AM

RE: Dollar Store Blues - by Wjames - 08-24-2017, 08:00 AM

RE: Dollar Store Blues - by billy - 08-24-2017, 05:17 PM

RE: Dollar Store Blues - by Richard - 08-24-2017, 10:42 PM

RE: First Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Richard - 08-25-2017, 12:59 PM

RE: First Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Tiger the Lion - 08-25-2017, 01:55 PM

RE: First Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by billy - 08-25-2017, 04:59 PM

RE: First Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Todd - 08-25-2017, 10:44 PM

RE: First Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Richard - 08-26-2017, 05:43 AM

RE: First Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Todd - 08-26-2017, 05:59 AM

RE: First Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Richard - 08-26-2017, 11:59 AM

RE: First Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by billy - 08-26-2017, 03:32 PM

RE: First Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Richard - 08-27-2017, 04:31 AM

RE: First Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Thunderembargo - 08-28-2017, 12:49 PM

RE: First Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by billy - 08-28-2017, 01:17 PM

RE: First Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Richard - 08-29-2017, 12:53 PM

RE: Second Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Richard - 09-01-2017, 05:17 AM

RE: Second Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Todd - 09-01-2017, 05:22 AM

RE: Second Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Richard - 09-01-2017, 05:38 AM

RE: Second Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Yjack123 - 09-12-2017, 12:12 AM

RE: Second Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Knot - 10-13-2017, 02:59 AM

RE: Second Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Richard - 10-13-2017, 11:33 AM

RE: Third Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Richard - 01-09-2018, 01:27 PM

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