08-31-2017, 06:00 AM
Hi Claire,
In basic, we tend to share more overall impressions and less line by line. So my main take away from this poem is that you rely on a lot of abstractions and not a lot of imagery. What that leads to is you could probably perform this well but it won't stick with people and be memorable. I can give specific details if you need them, but I'd encourage you to rethink your approach with this one.
Best,
Todd
In basic, we tend to share more overall impressions and less line by line. So my main take away from this poem is that you rely on a lot of abstractions and not a lot of imagery. What that leads to is you could probably perform this well but it won't stick with people and be memorable. I can give specific details if you need them, but I'd encourage you to rethink your approach with this one.
Best,
Todd
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson