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Third Edit: Dollar Store Blues

Third Edit: Dollar Store Blues
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08-26-2017, 05:43 AM
Hey Todd, Billy and Paul,
Thanks for the feedback. What would any of you say to cutting the first two lines completely? Just a thought.

Thanks again,
Richard
Time is the best editor.
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Messages In This Thread
Third Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Richard - 08-24-2017, 05:26 AM
RE: Dollar Store Blues - by Wjames - 08-24-2017, 08:00 AM
RE: Dollar Store Blues - by billy - 08-24-2017, 05:17 PM
RE: Dollar Store Blues - by Richard - 08-24-2017, 10:42 PM
RE: First Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Richard - 08-25-2017, 12:59 PM
RE: First Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by billy - 08-25-2017, 04:59 PM
RE: First Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Todd - 08-25-2017, 10:44 PM
RE: First Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Richard - 08-26-2017, 05:43 AM
RE: First Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Todd - 08-26-2017, 05:59 AM
RE: First Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Richard - 08-26-2017, 11:59 AM
RE: First Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by billy - 08-26-2017, 03:32 PM
RE: First Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Richard - 08-27-2017, 04:31 AM
RE: First Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by billy - 08-28-2017, 01:17 PM
RE: First Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Richard - 08-29-2017, 12:53 PM
RE: Second Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Richard - 09-01-2017, 05:17 AM
RE: Second Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Todd - 09-01-2017, 05:22 AM
RE: Second Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Richard - 09-01-2017, 05:38 AM
RE: Second Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Yjack123 - 09-12-2017, 12:12 AM
RE: Second Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Knot - 10-13-2017, 02:59 AM
RE: Second Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Richard - 10-13-2017, 11:33 AM
RE: Third Edit: Dollar Store Blues - by Richard - 01-09-2018, 01:27 PM



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