Sam's Song

[billy]

hi ecesis, if you rhyme, make them perfect, some of your rhymes don't rhyme. the language could work if it were a period piece but if it is it's hard to ascertain. a suggestion would be to be less ambiguous and get to some kind of point the reader can see, i'm no wiser to who sam is. also watch out for inverted syntax as in line 4. it only detracts from the reading. i did get a feel of pirates but only because of parlay and the pirates of the Caribbean