Sam's Song

[Richard]

Hey Ecesis,
I think you're trying hard here to be poetic, but I don't know if you always succeed. I'll go into more detail below:

Poor sam's mind,-I've read this poem multiple times now, and I still don't know who Sam is. If he's some sort of historical figure, may be include a last name.
has begun to leap away;
what urges his kop, -The word "kop" seems like an archaic word. I would suggest using a different word.
to the fields of no vision lay.

A fatigued mother,
leers at the wild eye,
wherein birls the fierce shine,
only seen in the evening sky.

What lures behind with dire grasp,
and turns this seaman's only helm;
for far away is port or home,
and long lost is a moral throne.-What is a "moral throne"? I would suggest explaining this image more.

Calibre once brought so dear a smile,
to parley warmth o'er cold vein; -Why "o'er" and not "over"?
to mount a precipice and be of padre use,
in joys well hid in antique hue.

Why the hope of plea,
keeps a iterate memorial— 
cold to eschew,
and only groping the depth,
in the never new. -Here's the thing with rhyming: if you are going to rhyme, you need to utilize longer lines. Short lines that rhyme are usually associated with nursery rhymes or comedic poetry.    

My biggest suggestions would be to edit this poem by dropping the rhymes and rewording it in spots so the language isn't so archaic. I look forward to seeing where you take this poem from here.

Keep writing,
Richard