undifined expression

undifined expression

DS85
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08-15-2017, 03:19 AM

I love the poem and how you convey a creator and their work. The only issue I have with reading it is "As they are me and mine, a making of my mind". Because of the alliteration I personally had to re-read the line a few times before it sunk in which took some away for me.

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undifined expression - by Pat Doiron - 07-18-2017, 07:37 AM

RE: undifined expression - by Raspberry Lemonade - 07-18-2017, 08:43 AM

RE: undifined expression - by Pat Doiron - 07-18-2017, 11:04 AM

RE: undifined expression - by CRNDLSM - 07-19-2017, 07:41 AM

RE: undifined expression - by Pat Doiron - 07-19-2017, 10:41 AM

RE: undifined expression - by Solstice - 07-20-2017, 06:23 AM

RE: undifined expression - by Pat Doiron - 07-20-2017, 09:53 AM

RE: undifined expression - by typing mantis - 07-22-2017, 04:59 PM

RE: undifined expression - by Pat Doiron - 07-22-2017, 08:52 PM

RE: undifined expression - by DS85 - 08-15-2017, 03:19 AM

RE: undifined expression - by Ecesis - 08-16-2017, 07:39 PM

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