Edit 2: The Scale in Amenthes

[Todd]

Hi, Let me give you a few comments:

The Scale in Amenthes 
 
Does the heart outweigh the plume? --Thankfully, I'd been watching American Gods which reminded me of the Egyptian afterlife. Is the heart heavier than a feather? Opening with a question isn't always the best but the phrasing sounds good to me.
Ammit would impatiently assume.--assume feels like it's here to accommodate the rhyme and not the content. Also, your meter feels inconsistent perhaps commit to a consistent number of feet or a consistent pattern. 
Sooner they would cut the baggage--The "they" just hangs there. It's unclear.
And lose amidst a rite of passage-
As I'd lose a shoe to wedded birds of feather.--I'm unclear on what you mean here. The word I think I'm supposed to key on is wedded. Perhaps I'm seeing a union separated by death--not sure.  
They'll see the wilting stems and golden blooms.--I like the contrast between wilted and golden but I'm not tying it into the content.
 
The faces in the observant dark, 
The Black-eyed Susan’s in an elm wood park.--I like the rhythm of these first two lines. It simply feels like the setup in S1 is asking for a connected list, and then you could rumble through it to add to the observation. I like the diction but it feels unconnected. 
Those dog days spent where offered umbrage--sounds awkward 
And firstly clutch some thistled corsage--so are we at a prom or formal dance. 
The second they would trace a pond.--they again 
No more, we can get on fine apart.--So now there's a sense of the dissolution of a relationship--a type of death.
 
Discovered light succeeds the place of absence;--perhaps found someone new 
A loosened eye among the glowing masses.--loosened eye sounds morbid. Especially if this is meant to say that person involved saw someone out of the crowd of options that they were interested in. 
Once would shadows cast a face in doubt--awkward phrasing, overly clunky. 
And trudge through shadows drunk and stout--drunk and stout makes me think of beer. I wonder if this layering of adjectives does anything positive here. 
And lumber with a heel or two. 
Now all it takes is a little practice 
 
To get to moving feet to quickened drummers--too many "to's" awkward 
As water skippers in the going summers. --going seems odd. Water skippers isn't bad. You could work with it.
Cicadas’ chirping all around,--I don't mind the sonics. It seems pretty basic though like saying cows mooing. 
And bang the skins till loudest drum astounds.--The second mention of drums. Neither seems to add much. Astounds does a good job telling me I should be astounded--it doesn't astound me though. I think the tag is a bit lazy. Rethink your phrasing perhaps. 
From the silence of the theatre bursts--This is the sort of line where you blend in imagery. 
Magnificent applause and mummer.--You could do something with applause and mummer--magnificent is a throwaway word. 
 
Years to don the robe and the stole;
Somnolent nights in academia’s hold.
Bodies wander and shuffle, and to its effect 
Show the shears, at their wake, its binding neglect. 
Where the whitewater winds to the sea 
A soul piece softly poised in the shoals. 
 
I, for nearing the third decade,
Have dug with shovel and spade 
For gems to adorn your finger. But bones 
O bones in the soil! Well, what curious light shone 
The callused, though careless, finger a-glimmer. 
Should then the feather weigh down like a stone 

As I'm in mild let me stop there. I hope you can use something from the comments.

Best,

Todd