07-21-2017, 01:31 PM
Thanks for your thoughts, everyone, sorry for the delay in responding.
I agree that playing with the punctuation could make it easier to read (especially aloud), but I like the breathless run on sentence feel, and adding comma's just for pauses can change the meaning. I'll have to think on this one some more.
I agree that playing with the punctuation could make it easier to read (especially aloud), but I like the breathless run on sentence feel, and adding comma's just for pauses can change the meaning. I'll have to think on this one some more.

