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[Keith]

I enjoyed the poem it made me compare young and old love, well sex really becuase the focus it set between legs. It made me think of intemacy and being happy just to be close, at both ages. For me the image is too precise it leads the reader away from their own path and makes the poem about a female from a male perspective when it actually could be read from a female perspective without the image. The matter of factness of the last line, the confirmation that nothing has changed over the years could be softer but I'm not sure it would work as well. Nothing else to add at this time, but very much enjoyed the memory recall Ray. Best Keith