Human Nature

[Tiger the Lion]

Hey WJ. I need more time with this. I live here so I can picture the scene whether it is well described or not. It's been a sticky couple of days so I can relate. The punctuation choices - or lack of - are interesting. I think you could play with some of the line breaks where commas might normally be inserted. I say that because for now I'm not inclined to insert them.

All red and sweaty between the thighs
with ants on my legs and bees smelling pollen
from the buds of her breasts, throbbing hard 
in the oak shade overlooking Lake Ontario's
grimy coast lined with dead fish half-eaten by dogs I read grimy as Grimsby - haha . Plus, I think it's the birds that get to the fish, more than dogs.
and covered in sand kicked up by dads on hikes
looking for memories in the bush. "memories" feels like a departure. Why the abstraction here at the end after all the other detail. Also feels like a bit of a jump from beach to bush.

Paul