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[Lizzie]

There you are standing
in a hat and raiment
blue as the hills
of Tuscany,
smiling
like you would melt into summer
as all the bells
ring in harmony.

No, it doesn't make a difference for me that the color is royal blue instead of just blue. So the lifeless/corpse-like person looks a little more regal than a homeless person being choked??? Sorry, the wording and the image is just too weird the way it is now.

Look, I get that you're trying to say (I think), "you look regal and lovely and your smile makes me happy and wistful like when I hear church bells" or something along these lines. I just think you need to work on the clarity of the grammar and the images. Is the person or the hat blue? Is completely ambiguous.

I'm ok with the golden/summer/Tuscany thing going on, I never associated Tuscany with blue (my fault perhaps), but the royalty image would work with Tuscany.

I think you're trying to convey a mood but requiring the reader to overlook a lot to get there. Some readers will go with you if your aesthetic is close to theirs. I usually do, but not today.

But, enough flogging.

Hey, you're the one who went and got spotlit and raised the bar for yourself.

And, no, it also doesn't matter to me that ellajam gets it perfectly.

And, yes, there's no cure for my twisted mind. To quote Rodger Rabbit, I'm not bad, I was born this way.