06-29-2017, 08:07 AM
Almost perfect. 
Something about the "as" breaks it for me. Maybe "hearing" instead. or
...summer.
The bells ring in harmony.
But beautiful.
edit after reading Todd:That was my first thought too, but it may be just the as, not the bells.
Something about the "as" breaks it for me. Maybe "hearing" instead. or
...summer.
The bells ring in harmony.
But beautiful.
edit after reading Todd:That was my first thought too, but it may be just the as, not the bells.
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