06-28-2017, 10:29 PM
Lovely work James! The final 2 lines really made the poem for me.
There is not much i can remark, safe for one thing: laser. Although the word
Does concey your message, it just feels off - thats just personal preference, though.
Thanks for sharing!
There is not much i can remark, safe for one thing: laser. Although the word
Does concey your message, it just feels off - thats just personal preference, though.
Thanks for sharing!

