Forgiven
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Lovely work James! The final 2 lines really made the poem for me.
There is not much i can remark, safe for one thing: laser. Although the word
Does concey your message, it just feels off - thats just personal preference, though.

Thanks for sharing!
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Messages In This Thread
Forgiven - by Wjames - 06-28-2017, 10:25 PM
RE: Forgiven - by The Four-Eyed Cat - 06-28-2017, 10:29 PM
RE: Forgiven - by vagabond - 06-29-2017, 02:15 AM
RE: Forgiven - by nibbed - 06-29-2017, 05:28 AM
RE: Forgiven - by Wjames - 06-29-2017, 08:01 AM



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