The Prometheus Man

[Lizzie]

The new title makes this one more interesting and part of a compelling broader narrative. I like it a lot.

Once, -- I don't think you need both "once" and "a day" -- it's redundant.
Angels left heaven for a day  -- "left" is a little weak. I'd search for a more interesting word.
And blazed through the skies -- I like "blazed"
Like golden meteors 
Leaving contrails of stardust -- fabulous line
In their wake -- you don't need this. Contrails are the wake of planes/rockets by definition. Plus, if you cut it, then you can end on the stardust line, which is really strong.


Oh, how I spite those glittering roads -- nice
For yanking at my chains -- I'm torn about this one. It's a cliche, and a cliched one at that. But, Prometheus was chained, so.... Maybe the chains could burn or something.
And how I turn green
At the sight of seagulls -- good sonics with green/sight of seagulls. A satisfying ending.

You can drop the capitalization at the beginning of the lines. It's not needed.

I enjoyed it and look forward to where you take it with the edit.

Lizzie