Wills

[Achebe]

Wills
 
It wasn't you that flopped out dead .... "flopped out" is great
on the Godless sheets 
of a hospital bed ..... "godless" is too intrusive, POV. Too many words by this point.
when your mother miscarried.
 
But you know you were baptized
in another girl's name. ..... so what? The revelation at the end is rather ho-hum. "I'm tired now, Richieu, and it's too many stories already". You gotta top that.