06-22-2017, 03:27 PM
(06-22-2017, 07:05 AM)Flowerchild1093 Wrote: To be honest, I can't quite tell exactly what the theme is here. In some parts I feel as though the speaker is homeless, then I feel like he takes the train alot and we're speaking of his rides between stops, and then there are areas where it seems he maybe takes the train or subway to avoid driving for some type of fear of it. Regardless of the theme, the ebb and flow of your verses is lovely and flows very well for me personally. I also enjoy many of your word choices and although I feel like I'm grasping at straws when it comes to the theme, it's quite beautiful. You don't have to voice exactly what you were going for if you don't want to, but I would enjoy knowing if you have the time to respond. Thanks for sharing.[/quote]
Hiya FlowerChild, thanks for the comment!
I don't blame you for being unsure as to theme - since writing it, my own idea of what inspired the write hasn't been completely stable, but I'd love to explain it (as best I can!)
It initially began as a very personal piece, about not feeling at home in my own home (a very industrial, unloving environment). However, as I wrote and afterwards, I quickly realised it might resonate with any people who are homeless, or feel the same way.
I tend to avoid nailing down what I write to a single theme, but perhaps this is a bit too vague!
Thanks again