The Prometheus Man

[Todd]

Hi Chorus, welcome to the site! There's a lot of touches that I like here. I'm reminded of the Gospel of Luke with the words of Jesus saying he saw Satan fall like lightning. I take this poem as the observations of the chained fallen angel watching a freedom that he once enjoyed. A few comments below:

Once--I'm taking this as a title not a first line. 
Angels left heaven for a day  
And they blazed through the skies--you don't need they
Like golden meteors 
Leaving contrails of stardust--This is a great image--very visual. I love contrails of stardust. 
In their wake--Wake is a solid choice to give a nautical foreshadowing to the later seagulls. 


Oh, how I spite those glittering roads
For yanking at my chains 
And how I turn green--This is nice for the dual meaning envy/and a bit of seasickness implied by the birds juxtaposing the speaker's captivity with the unhindered motion of the angels.
At the sight of seagulls--Seagulls is what truly makes this interesting though. Not an obvious bird choice. I took this as a dismissive comparison. Perhaps because they are scavengers. They cling to their positions and dive for the crumbs.

Best,

Todd