Crush on an Artistic Babe

[ellajam]

Hi, there's a lot I like here and some irksome bugs. First: and/but/so/still. You have me reading aaaand/buuuuut/sooooo/stiiiiill and I can't figure out why. It gives the poem a rambling feel and pace that for me doesn't really suit the frustration. It makes me think the N is just bored with the whole situation, so then why isn't he just moving on? The other thing I can't understand is using capitalization in the middle of sentences instead of punctuation. Both these devices stand out as "different" but I can't figure out what they add to the poem. Maybe I'm slow but I've given the poem plenty of time to come together and it won't. Some notes:

She spoke in words like simile fests Strong opening, continues the title. Possible hyphen after simile. Also, made me think of smile-fest, which made me smile.
and
Her sketches reminded me of Rorschach Tests Why capitalize "her". Fun rhyme. Punctuation after tests.
I was entranced and a little hornswoggled
Mainly self-inflicted Why is Mainly capitalized? "situation (or something) self-inflicted" might be clearer..
but
hopelessly mind boggled. mind-boggled, again, fun rhyme.

Emotions bottled up, things bottomed out fun line, etc on the caps vs punctuation thing.
This expression thing. What’s it about?
So
my own cacophonies, I screeched
Finger paintings, I bleached bleached is forced, how do fingerpaints bleach except with time and that doesn't suit the immediacy of this poem. I'd find another pair.
Still
I’m in other ways frustrated "other ways" too vague, just say it.
with what I have created.

So, this may be a bit much for the Basic workshop but your consistency shows you've made your choices carefully, I'd just like you to reconsider those choices for this poem. Thanks for the read, I like the dilemma, the way you've portrayed it and the language of the poem.