Jinni

[Todd]

Hi Lizzie,

I know you've gotten a few comments on this. Hopefully, these can bring additional clarity to the rewrite.

The Jinni asks: how do you wish--This is a strong line break. It makes the surprise of "to die?" that much better.
to die? It's the gift of choice and knowledge,--While I think this last sentence provides a motive for the wish it robs the opening of the tension. If you must bring these ideas in perhaps blend them into the overall body of the poem. I would very simply end S1 on "die". 
release from the thickening suspense.

Do you want to die quick--I don't like the repetition of to die. I would consider condensing these options. For example, Do you want/the lightning-crack of dynamite/or asteroid impact?
like the lightning-crack of dynamite
or asteroid impact?
Do you want your body to remain
intact in hope of resurrection—--Nice play on the idea if your hand offends you cut it off. It is better to enter eternal life crippled than to be cast whole into hell. I do feel though that heart attack or Anthrax should come before bodily ressurection.
maybe heart attack or Anthrax?
Do you want the fame you didn't have--This part seems like it should have its own strophe.
in life, a death for the Guinness books--in life may be unnecessary.
and a story gone viral?--viral is a good end word just because it is often associated with death (plague) and you repurpose it while still saying on theme.

Do you want your death to dress--Again I would cut the repetition and cut "your death"
your story in white, bookends of goodness,
cloaking your putrid life
in fragrant funeral sheets?--This is a good description of most every funeral. 
The Jinni can grant you absolution:
save a Hybrid full of babies
from a Humvee full of pedophiles
with twisted, pointy mustaches
slicked slimy with trans-fatty fry grease.

The Jinni is an ifrit—
it can make things happen.--Not sure this strophe is needed.

Some people choose to simply --replace choose with wish
fall asleep;
they take a breath,
then exhale.

Most fall into silence, hoping
that the Jinni is the one who decides
whether dying must always result in death. --I love the last line. It's the best in the poem.

I think you have something interesting here. I hope the comments are useful.

Best,

Todd