06-19-2017, 07:34 AM
Now I'm getting a story of suicide, and wrongful conviction for murder ( which the wife has decided is the best way to keep her husband fed and housed and cared for when she's gone.
The story from the husband's POV un til the middle MS, then her story unfolds?
Fascinating way to write this. I'm seeing a DNA spiral.
I really like the focus on numbers, patterns, while dealing with life and death matters.
Some imagery is stunning - especially I like this line 'starfish, snail shells, sunflowers, pineapples.' all of which illustrate the Fib spiral.
Your iambs get a bit rough but that doesn't bother me.
Well done, and a sad story, from both sides.
The story from the husband's POV un til the middle MS, then her story unfolds?
Fascinating way to write this. I'm seeing a DNA spiral.
I really like the focus on numbers, patterns, while dealing with life and death matters.
Some imagery is stunning - especially I like this line 'starfish, snail shells, sunflowers, pineapples.' all of which illustrate the Fib spiral.
Your iambs get a bit rough but that doesn't bother me.
Well done, and a sad story, from both sides.