Dear Leviathan - Edit

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Hi, dukealien. Your poem blessed me. It also helped me. Thank you.


Dear Leviathan                                                                                     Should this be a salutation?


Plump hippopotamus all round and cute,
seductively stealth-swimming half-submerged,
whose baby-fat proportions strike us mute -                                         I think I like this line best in the poem
her winsome smile infects us, caution purged.
We love our hippo, chuckle at her girth,
her rolling clumsiness, her comic ears;
we marvel at her underwater birth,
her teary, piggy eyes that shame our fears.                                          how would they shame your fears?
She trots to catch and crush us though we dote;                                 this is frightening in a way, hippos are vicious
her smile hides dagger-fangs, bone-red and pale                                    woah, I just realized they have fangs
with which she hooks us when she flips a boat
and drowns us, distant aunt of killer whale.                                            this is curious
    Beloved hippo, gross embodiment -                                                  love the use of these words here
    how like she is to nanny-government!                                              



dukealien, what a joy to read, and an encouragement, too.
I was once inspired to write a poem about Hippos. They
certainly are inspiring! Your desriptions were captivating,
and the ending confirmed its clever twist. Thank you.
Have a blessed evening!

janine