Edit 1: The Searing Flame

[nibbed]

Thanks alot for these kind words Nibbed!

I'm going to take these points into consideration and think how i can make it better! Regarding your first one (on elimination) - What do you think of
"Insurmountable strength (flows) while i hold the world by its reins"?

Hi, The Four-Eyed Cat.

I understand the cleverness of the word insurmountable,
but it almost seems as if it is hammy or cheap.
Plus it has an awkward syllabic quality.

Best wishes for you and your poem.
Janine