06-07-2017, 10:49 AM
The way I visualized it was, ripe tomatos set the season (not too warm, but long enough after pollination*), and the weekenders massacred the small-to-medium wildlife (rushing to their vacation cottages and then rushing away in the night to be back at the office Monday morning... the weekenders, not the wildlife) leaving roadkill for the vultures. Agree with the revision making the birds simple plural rather than plural possessive. Otherwise, though, kind of favor the original line structure: each line is a consequence of the one before.
Metaphor games could make the tourists ripe fruit and the vultures weekenders... or the weekenders vultures and the tomatos tourists in their season. Nice: pointilism with three bright dots.
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Metaphor games could make the tourists ripe fruit and the vultures weekenders... or the weekenders vultures and the tomatos tourists in their season. Nice: pointilism with three bright dots.
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Non-practicing atheist

