06-07-2017, 08:20 AM
This is wonderful - sound and sentiment, both. SSSand...
The only thing I missed was a reprise of the last line of the first stanza's curtailment later on. True, it's like an open-parenthesis for the insect life in the second stanza. But that same effect would have been quite nice at the very end IMHO.
Perhaps too systematic, me. The poem's just lovely as it is.
The only thing I missed was a reprise of the last line of the first stanza's curtailment later on. True, it's like an open-parenthesis for the insect life in the second stanza. But that same effect would have been quite nice at the very end IMHO.
Perhaps too systematic, me. The poem's just lovely as it is.
Non-practicing atheist