06-05-2017, 01:00 AM
oh, two dashes is my substitute for em dash, and the / only indicated a line break. ie,
I drifted in and out of sleep -- my dreams became the sky:
a silent movie melded from the pageant passing by.
On second thought, it's unsatisfactory. I would suggest this now:
I drifted in and out of sleep. My dreams became the sky,
a silent movie melded from the pageant passing by.
or
I drifted in and out of sleep; my dreams became the sky,
a silent movie melded from the pageant passing by.
As far as I recall, semicolons separate, when not listing, independent clauses, so it's more appropriate to separate these two lines with either a colon or a comma.
I drifted in and out of sleep -- my dreams became the sky:
a silent movie melded from the pageant passing by.
On second thought, it's unsatisfactory. I would suggest this now:
I drifted in and out of sleep. My dreams became the sky,
a silent movie melded from the pageant passing by.
or
I drifted in and out of sleep; my dreams became the sky,
a silent movie melded from the pageant passing by.
As far as I recall, semicolons separate, when not listing, independent clauses, so it's more appropriate to separate these two lines with either a colon or a comma.