05-30-2017, 04:54 AM
(05-30-2017, 02:06 AM)spiritthebrave Wrote: I see a fire
warm and bright
welcome me
from dark of night The dark?
The path before me
now seems clear
and with the clarity
comes great fear comes and great are weak words
The monsters
they have been revealed
it seems that my fate
is now sealed now again?
Perhaps a battle
will breakout
he'll break my leg he'll the monsters?
I'll swipe his snout
Perhaps quick death
will be my fate I thought fate was sealed
quite gory
he won't hesitate
I'm bathed in fear
I'm numb with fright
The end is near
I see the light you've seen the fire from the beginning warm? Bathed and numb, fear and fright
And damn you light
you've caused this all
your luring draw
has been my fall I think this stanza says everything your whole poem is trying to say, and should focus and work around it, pretty much scrapping the majority
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