05-14-2017, 02:44 AM
I like the way the poem flows and, as a previous person wrote, I too found myself trying to fit it into a song, or ballad.
The poem says almost nothing about ‘he’ and reading it makes me curious about who ‘he’ is. Is he a widower who re-married? Perhaps a prolific writer? Someone for whom the word ‘truth’ does not seem to mean a lot. Did it ever land him in serious trouble?
It might have been a good idea to work some of this information into the poem..
Enjoyed it.
Crashed his hearse
on a one-way cul de sac….Would have been funny, but for subject matter.
Survived his widow
and he then drove back
His ghostwritten prose,
all autobiographies …
… tweak’d Pinocchio’s nose ..nice metaphor
with false tautologies
Consistency, veracity
with him had died
He’d only be truthful
when he said that he lied/
The poem says almost nothing about ‘he’ and reading it makes me curious about who ‘he’ is. Is he a widower who re-married? Perhaps a prolific writer? Someone for whom the word ‘truth’ does not seem to mean a lot. Did it ever land him in serious trouble?
It might have been a good idea to work some of this information into the poem..
Enjoyed it.
Crashed his hearse
on a one-way cul de sac….Would have been funny, but for subject matter.
Survived his widow
and he then drove back
His ghostwritten prose,
all autobiographies …
… tweak’d Pinocchio’s nose ..nice metaphor
with false tautologies
Consistency, veracity
with him had died
He’d only be truthful
when he said that he lied/