mother

[67eager]

After reading this poem a couple of times, I think I finally managed to collect an interpretation, and I was thoroughly impressed. You seeemed to not be talking about the god which is referred to in the bible, but more the god which is responsible for the order of the universe. 'Searching every element' seems to talk about the way we used the rigid scientific method all to find out who god is, but our failure to do so is highlighted by 'rotten gardens'. This seems to mean that he past is too distorted, and destroyed, and thus unable to truly grasp onto. In the second stanza you talk about the way we invent gods to make up for this frustrating curiosity, or in other words, finding definate answers to indefinite wonders. In the final stanza, to me, you seem to make a logically attempt to prove gods existence-  we feel pain because a greater being does at the same time. You provide a good, and emotionally complex argument supporting religion for skeptics such as myself. There are some lines however, that I have trouble making sense of:
 


we measured every element

down to your iron core we scanned

but who you are is long forgotten

secret gardens reaped and rotten.

 

deprived you of your mystic name My lack of imagination has caused a bit of a struggle on this line.

invent a god who´s far away

for to despoil you of your limbs 

“make earth subject” as bible prints I'm not really sure about is one either.

 

but we´re your children,

you´re our ground

we ache cause we do

share your wounds.





Edit
thanks to all critics

mother



we measured every element
down to your iron core we scanned
but who you are is long forgotten
secret gardens reaped and rotten.

your name´s denied and undermined
by crafted gods and false commands,
our warrant to despoil  your  limbs.
the answer that you give is grim.

we´re self-aware but cancerous sprouts,
germs ovlivious to our ground.
we ache cause we do
share your wounds.






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here we go, it´s plain and preachy again. if i only knew how to make it more subtle.
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