Falling Toward Grace

[nibbed]

Hi Elizazile

this is a great poem. I didn't want to critique at first because it really touched me.




Growing through loneliness                                 I love how this ties into wallow
Just don't let me end up like this 
I figure all I can do
Is wallow over you
Til alone gets great
Or normal
Til I've stayed up out of arms                           
Long enough to stop feeling phantoms              this is perfect
I think a little pain might be the bridge                 I don't know why baby popped into my head, just for a second
From here to heaven
Or here to standing straight
And maybe one day
After falling forever with no net
I'll land soft and gentle
In my own life.


this touches on many things concerning
loneliness. the title is becoming, too.

I hope you have a wonderful day filled
will happiness and joy

janine